a different version of the first three days

here is the first three days in a version of genesis written in a way meant to follow the original hebrew. i like how full of possibilities it is, and the poetry in it-

At the beginning of God's creating of
the heavens and the earth,
when the earth was wild and waste,
darkness over the face of Ocean,
rushing-spirit of God hovering over the face of the waters-

God said: Let there be light! and there was light.
God saw the light: that it was good.
God seperated the light from the darkness.
God called the light: Day! and the darkness he called: Night!
there was setting , there was dawning: first day

God said:
Let there be a dome amid the waters,
and let it seperate waters from waters!
God made the dome
and seperated the waters that were below the dome from the
waters that were above the dome.
It was so.
God called the dome: Heaven!
there was setting, there was dawning: second day

and finally my favorite day, the third day, not that i know why it is my favorite, but it is

God said:
Let the waters under the Heavens be gathered to one place,
and let the dry land be seen!
It was so.
God called the dry land: Earth! and the gathering of the waters
he called: Seas!
God saw that it was good.
God said:
Let the earth sprout forth with sprouting growth,
plants that seed forth seeds, after their kind,
fruit trees that yield fruit, after their
kind, (and) in which is their seed, upon the earth!
It was so.
The earth brought forth sprouting-growth,
plants that seed forth seeds, after their kind,
fruit trees that yeild fruit, in which is their seed, after their kind,
God saw that it was good.
There was setting, there was dawning: third day.

...if i didnt have so many other expensive intentions, i would buy the entire everett fox version of the bible, but it just wont be so right now...